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Elizabeth Sparks, the midnight daughter

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Post by ckony 3/31/2010, 9:57 pm

This is a history that I writte for an other forum. In this moment I am trying to translate, here is the Synopsis, I will up chapter if you like it.

Synopsis

Do not call me Buffy, I am too much better. I am not saying that Buffy do bad her work, but I am crying too much tears more than Buffy.

Everything started that night. A cool night, when they robbed me all. All started when the night adopted me.

Now I am the Midnight Daughter. And now that creatures inmortals, that creatures who love cause fear, have to be afraid, because they are not from this world, they have to be dead.

But in my way to try make justice, there is some things that I have never thought.


Tell me what you think and if is there a mistakes I am sorry.
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 3/31/2010, 10:00 pm

You're fine. Yes, there are some errors, but I do understand what you try to say, in what you wrote.

It's wonderful!

Please post more. smiley
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Post by ckony 4/1/2010, 2:08 pm

Thanks Mia In spanish is better
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Post by Avé 4/1/2010, 2:27 pm

Oh, I really like it! :3

Could you, by any chance, post it in Spanish, too?
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Post by Blue Aqua Wind 4/1/2010, 2:35 pm

i like it. Very Happy
you should post more. (:
and it'd be cool if you posted it in spanish too. ^^
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Post by catbuster 4/1/2010, 3:46 pm

I like it, and am now sad that I can't understand spanish Razz but you should post it for those who do, because it would be easier to read.
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Post by ckony 4/1/2010, 9:08 pm

ok its in spanish because i am still translate it.

Prefacio

Era una noche apacible y tranquila. Nada fuera de lo común. Mi madre estaba cocinando en la cocina, yo estaba en mi cuarto jugando con mis muñecas. Según mi mamá mi padre no estaba en casa por que él estaba haciendo cosas importantes en otro país, pero para mi que no era así; aunque una niña de 5 años no puede discutir esos temas con su madre.

Sentí que alguien tocaba la puerta desde el piso de abajo. La curiosidad siempre era más fuerte por lo que comenze a desender las escaleras. Pero sentí a mi madre discutir no se con quien.

Seguí bajando las escaleras...

Entonces sentí algo como si algo se quebrará, un trozo de vidrio, una ventana. Luego vino otro sonido de algo rompiendose. El sonido de algo rompiendo la pared, un trozo de metal a travesando las murallas.

Me asuste mucho y baje más a prisa los escalones.

Mi madre se interpuso en mi camino, me tomo en sus brazos y rápidamente me llevo de vuelta a mi cuarto.

- Elizabeth quedate aquí y no hagas ruido - dijo esconiendome bajo la cama que siempre tenía juguetes bajo ella y que ella utilizo para intentar taparme lo mejor posible.

Sus manos temblaban, sus ojos llenos de preocupación y miedo causaban en mi una sensación de insertidumbre, hubiera echo todo por ayudarla.

Sentí como si algo atravesara la puerta, intente asomarme a mirar cuando mi madre se aparto de mi lado, quedando totalmente indefensa al dueño de esas terribles garras que habían atravesado la puerta.

No quisé ver.

No quise saber.

Tenía una piel pálida y unos ojos rojos injectados en sangre. Era el ser que más miedo me causo en mi vida. Y que termino con ella.

Mire un pequeño reloj, a pesar de ser de juguete podía dar la hora. Medianoche.


I am going to translate for the ones who dont know how to speak in spanish
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Post by ckony 4/3/2010, 3:00 pm

girls i am sick so i can not translate becouse i fell so bad
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Post by Blue Aqua Wind 4/3/2010, 3:03 pm

ohh, it's qreat in spanish. Very Happy

anyways, i hope you feel better soon, connie. (:
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Post by Avé 4/3/2010, 3:47 pm

Eso es muy bueno, Gloria. Very Happy
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