The Verge of Breaking
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Komoda
Jade
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LuckyPenny666
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Akeria
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The Verge of Breaking
Well, hello.
I haven't seen you for a while, here,
Don't cha know?
Yes, everything's been fine, here,
How are you?
No I'm not the only child, here,
You are too.
And I said, "Hey there, don't you remember,
When we were so much younger?
It was only last December.
But I hoped you would remember.
Because I've been wishing,
My heart has been aching,
It's on the verge of breaking,
Because I've been wishing,
Just for you."
How's your life?
It's gotten oh, so dark, here,
You've got a wife?
I've been stranded in the park, here,
Don't you care?
But then I guess I've got a life, here,
Love's so rare.
Yes, I said "Hey there, don't you remember,
When we were so much younger?
It was only last December.
But I hoped you would remember.
Because I've been wishing,
My heart has been aching,
It's on the verge of breaking,
Because I've been wishing,
Just for you."
Sometimes I hoped that you would find
Your way back to me just in time
For me to see you as I once did
And you and I would skid
Back to where we once were,
When we once were Here.
But I said, "Hey there, don't you remember,
When we were so much younger?
It was only last December.
But I hoped you would remember.
Because I've been wishing,
My heart has been aching,
It's on the verge of breaking,
Because I've been wishing,
Just for you."
Just for you.
Just for you.
Just for you.
It's on the verge of breaking,
I'm on the verge of breaking.
I haven't seen you for a while, here,
Don't cha know?
Yes, everything's been fine, here,
How are you?
No I'm not the only child, here,
You are too.
And I said, "Hey there, don't you remember,
When we were so much younger?
It was only last December.
But I hoped you would remember.
Because I've been wishing,
My heart has been aching,
It's on the verge of breaking,
Because I've been wishing,
Just for you."
How's your life?
It's gotten oh, so dark, here,
You've got a wife?
I've been stranded in the park, here,
Don't you care?
But then I guess I've got a life, here,
Love's so rare.
Yes, I said "Hey there, don't you remember,
When we were so much younger?
It was only last December.
But I hoped you would remember.
Because I've been wishing,
My heart has been aching,
It's on the verge of breaking,
Because I've been wishing,
Just for you."
Sometimes I hoped that you would find
Your way back to me just in time
For me to see you as I once did
And you and I would skid
Back to where we once were,
When we once were Here.
But I said, "Hey there, don't you remember,
When we were so much younger?
It was only last December.
But I hoped you would remember.
Because I've been wishing,
My heart has been aching,
It's on the verge of breaking,
Because I've been wishing,
Just for you."
Just for you.
Just for you.
Just for you.
It's on the verge of breaking,
I'm on the verge of breaking.
Last edited by Akeria on 2/12/2010, 9:05 pm; edited 1 time in total
Re: The Verge of Breaking
:3 Amazing job, Keri. This is definitely a song. I could even hear a tune in my head as I read it. x3 It actually sounds really good, too.
Lol, well, the words themselves anyway, instead of my imaginary tune, are epic. They're so sweet and awesome.
Lol, well, the words themselves anyway, instead of my imaginary tune, are epic. They're so sweet and awesome.
Re: The Verge of Breaking
You really did a great job with the song. It's very well written and it has a lovely rythym.
LuckyPenny666- Novella Composer
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
Thanks.
It took all of twenty minutes, to be honest. Once I know what I want to write about, I can just do it. The hard part is rhyming. -_-
It took all of twenty minutes, to be honest. Once I know what I want to write about, I can just do it. The hard part is rhyming. -_-
Re: The Verge of Breaking
Wow, it's so cool that you're able to do that! I can sometimes, but rhyming is also difficult for me. Usually, they come out bad, though.
LuckyPenny666- Novella Composer
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
I look up words that rhyme with a word, and then when they give me stupid ones, I can usually get an idea. Lol.
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XD That's awesome.
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
This. Is. Completely. Amazing!
FOREIGN?!- Novel Creator
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
It's amazing, I love how you made it have verses like a song. The title is great too!
CocoaPuff- Flash Fiction Scrawler
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
Why the question mark?
CocoaPuff- Flash Fiction Scrawler
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
Mistake.
I asked my Mom a question at the same time, so I put that. My bad.
Thank you.
I asked my Mom a question at the same time, so I put that. My bad.
Thank you.
Re: The Verge of Breaking
I had the extremely strong urge to give you a reputation point dunno way xD
Anyway, I love the poem!!
Anyway, I love the poem!!
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
This is epic, Akeria! It's amazing how you can have speaking in the song but still make it have a good rhythm. Great job!
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
Amazing. You should totally record this as a song.
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Re: The Verge of Breaking
Thanks, Anita! I actually wrote the melody for it. I'm working on the piano part. But once I get it down, I'll record it and put it up.
Oh, I'm sorry Amazon. Thank you, though.
Oh, I'm sorry Amazon. Thank you, though.
Re: The Verge of Breaking
Keri, this is amazing. You're so talented, did you know that?
Avé- Best-Selling Author
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Whoah, that was really awesome. =)
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