This Little Town
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This Little Town
In this little town
One I've always known
Lived here all my life
It's all ours in our own
Say something worth sharing
Within hours of time
The news will travel quickly
Your phone, her phone, mine
In this little town,
A murder once took place
Excitement filled the people
Fear rests on every face
Innocent as she was
Expected nothing from that drive
Someone must not have liked her
She didn't make it home alive
And soon, everyone knew
Gossip made it's way around
Around the frightened friends,
Around this little town
But I was not excited
No, I couldn't be
See, there was a problem
That girl - that girl was me
One I've always known
Lived here all my life
It's all ours in our own
Say something worth sharing
Within hours of time
The news will travel quickly
Your phone, her phone, mine
In this little town,
A murder once took place
Excitement filled the people
Fear rests on every face
Innocent as she was
Expected nothing from that drive
Someone must not have liked her
She didn't make it home alive
And soon, everyone knew
Gossip made it's way around
Around the frightened friends,
Around this little town
But I was not excited
No, I couldn't be
See, there was a problem
That girl - that girl was me
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Ooh... creepy. o.0 I'm really hoping that's not a true story, Ave. xD
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Don't worry, I'm not a ghost. xD
And thanks!
And thanks!
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Good. xD
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Ooh, I like this poem, Ave. Particularly the second stanza.
I also like how in the last one, you say, "see, there was a problem" like you were in trouble or something, and it was a lot more than anyone expected. In some way I find that quite awesome. Then again, all your poetry is awesome!
I also like how in the last one, you say, "see, there was a problem" like you were in trouble or something, and it was a lot more than anyone expected. In some way I find that quite awesome. Then again, all your poetry is awesome!
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Awesome job. Nice twist at the end, and I love how it was from the victim's perspective.
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Awesome poem, Ave!!! You did great job writing it from the victim's view of things.
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Oh. My. Gosh. AMAZING! I love what you've done!
But seriously. If you really were a ghost, I'd freak.
But seriously. If you really were a ghost, I'd freak.
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What if I am? 0__o
Just kidding. Thanks!
Just kidding. Thanks!
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According to Mafia, I'm a ghost now.
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I do not know how I missed this one. Anyways, I love the poem, Avvles! It almost made me turn around and go look out the window at the end. o..O
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Mia be a ghostie too.
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OMG! That is freaky! xD I hope it is fiction. xD
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Trust me, it is, Maiisy. xD
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That's what I said. xD
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EIPCNESS!!!!! I wov every bit of it, awesome!!
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I see why this poem was featured, because its awesome!
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Oooh, cool poem!! Slightly creepy in a cool, mysterious way. Good job
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