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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/21/2009, 1:55 pm







fantasy: Part magical spells maybe. Also realistic.
maturity: kissing , relationships , fighting scences.





INTRODUCTION

There was always something strange as Gargfield High School ... Was it because some people had different color eyes like purple or burgendy color? No one knows it was just like a normal high school there where jocks the preppy girls the goths the kids people didn't even know exist but then there where just strange kids the kids that all looked the same with the purple eyes or burgendy that only hanged out with each other. Some would say that those kids would have some kind of power alliens or somethind some just belived they where just different an thats how they where born ...
But the real question is will the answer ever be uncovered?



Introduction 1

Reanne was a different girl she had one best friend an that was it some would say she was one of those kids that might be an allien or with different powers ... But Reanne dynied it she had blue eyes nothing unusual. But people would say that because she would always seperate her self from the other students ... execept her best freind violet ... Reanne didn't do choir or band drama not activities unless she had to ... Violet even sometimes thought Reanne could be one of them but surely never let Reanne knew that ... Not many people know this but Reanne moved here in the middle of freshman here was it because she was the quiet girl an everyone just didn't notice her? Another thing that know one knows at her new high school is that she was popular at her old school she was the stuck up girl that had to have the exspensiveist clothes and went out with the jock ... the popularist guy in school . She just got tired of it all ....
But was Reanne one of them? So many questions ....


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Post by PugsRock 8/21/2009, 2:18 pm

Good job. Can I just say a few things?

You should have the fantasy and maturity at the top of the post.

And one more- when there's a question in a story, there shouldn't be a space between the words and question mark. This would be correct:

How are you?

And you don't need all those ...'s. xD

Smile


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Post by Arianna 8/21/2009, 3:16 pm

It's a nice story, I can't wait to see where it goes. Like pugs said, the questions should go with no space between the last word and the question mark, and also maybe you should try and add some commas for easier reading.
Good job, though!
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/21/2009, 6:32 pm

okay thanks ...Smile
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Post by Jade 8/21/2009, 6:55 pm

I like it Brooke, I can''t wait to read more!! Smile
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/21/2009, 10:01 pm

Good thanks glad you like it if was bad would you guys tell me?
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Post by Arianna 8/22/2009, 3:04 am

Yep, we would, and it isn't bad. no
You have a few small problems with grammar, but it really has us waiting for more so of course it's good! Wink
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Post by shadowsowner888 8/22/2009, 8:42 am

I like it! Very Happy

You do need the maturity and fantasy at the top, though. Smile Please make sure you put this in.
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/22/2009, 3:56 pm

[ Okay thanks i will write away ]
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/22/2009, 4:14 pm

[ Okay what do i put for fantasy ? ]
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Post by Arianna 8/23/2009, 1:24 am

Perhaps something like
Fantasy: Magical people, powers, spells.
But I don't really know all that's going to happen. Basically put anything there that couldn't realistically happen in real life nod
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/23/2009, 10:34 am

Okay thank you.
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/23/2009, 12:47 pm

Okay i fixed it.
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Post by shadowsowner888 8/23/2009, 1:21 pm

Thanks for adding them. Smile
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Post by *Strongly*[Emo]tional 8/23/2009, 1:23 pm

Thanks for reminding me!
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