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My Secret Love Unknown {Edited!}

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Post by Cyn431 11/14/2009, 7:22 pm

I was sitting here, bored, thinking, and decided to make another attempt at songwriting (I've done so before, but I never thought of them as quality).

I have a lot of spill-out-whatever-comes-to-mind planning that will, hopefully, lead me to a song at some point. nod

Inspiration is... previous events of someone I know. Yeah.

Spoiler:

Okay, now I've started a draft of what the song could be.


VERSE 1:
I didn’t even see it comin’
It hit me like a strike of lightnin’
All it took you was one hit
And with one blow you did it
The possibility never crossed my mind
That somebody else would be the love you’d find
But questions cross by me all the time
I wonder if I’ll find their answers why

CHORUS:
When I see you holding her
Why does it feel so wrong
It could never be me
So why do I keep holding on
When I know you’ve chosen her
Over me

VERSE 2:
Sometimes I wonder if you knew
If you ever even had a clue
What I've been doing all these years:
I was starin' at you, my dear
How could you not see me
My love for you's so clear
But I guess outer beauty beats the true kind
But could you still give me the answers why

When I see you holding her
Why does it feel so wrong
It could never be me
So why do I keep holding on
When I know you’ve chosen her
Over me

VERSE 3:
It’s quarter to midnight
And just when I thought my pain was gone
While the rain played a song in the moonlight
My tears sang along

Oh, oh

When I see you holding her
Why does it feel so wrong
It could never be me
So why do I keep holding on
When I know you’ve chosen her
Over me

Oh, I guess it’s time to move on
‘Cause you’ve left me alone
Did you have a clue, did you ever know

My secret love unknown


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Post by LuckyPenny666 11/15/2009, 12:20 am

Wow...this is really good, but sad. I'm sorry that it's like this for you. :-(
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Post by Cyn431 11/15/2009, 12:32 am

Thanksies, smiley

Yeah, well, I like to take it as "happens to everybody at one point, get over it, cliche, blah." But the tears part, I swear, one of these days.... Well, enjoy happiness while I got it. nod
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Post by shadowsowner888 11/15/2009, 3:28 pm

Awwww. Sad After just reading the spoiler, I'm already reacting emotionally. I'm so sorry. *huggle*

Is he into music? Surprised Maybe if he finds out someday you wrote a song about him, he'll end up falling for you . . . don't give up hope.

Awww! That was such a sad song. Sad I really liked it - especially this line.
My tears sang along.
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Post by Cyn431 11/15/2009, 4:27 pm

Awwww. My Secret Love Unknown {Edited!} Icon_sad After just reading the spoiler, I'm already reacting emotionally. I'm so sorry. *huggle*

Is he into music? My Secret Love Unknown {Edited!} Icon_surprised Maybe if he finds out someday you wrote a song about him, he'll end up falling for you . . . don't give up hope.

Awww! That was such a sad song. My Secret Love Unknown {Edited!} Icon_sad I really liked it - especially this line.
My tears sang along.
*huggles back* Thanksies.

Well, I, being my eavesdropping self, overheard in Language Arts last year that he plays bass (like, the really low guitar, not the cello-like thing).
And yeah, you can't give up hope... wink'
[Now I'm starting to really wish I'd auditioned a Weird Ally song for the Talent Show [Ally because I happen to be an Ally.... Haha]

Thanks; it's a lot easier to write, and meaningful, when you've experienced what you're writing--or swear any one of these days you will.
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Post by Cyn431 11/16/2009, 8:32 pm

Edited. wink
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