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Post by FOREIGN?! 4/21/2010, 10:37 pm

    Okay, so, the coding on this one sorta looks weird. But that's okay. Because it's the words that count. xD This is a song I'm writing, but I'm not done yet, but I felt like posting it. Because I felt like it. And I'm like that. nod


one bird was lying on the ground while the others were flying
one bird didn't notice, that he was lying right there, dying
one bird had the best feathers, one was simply better
one bird was in a teardrop that I sent inside a letter

I don't know why I've been looking for you, I know you're not there
I don't know why you're gone for good, vanished into air
I don't know why you second guessed yourself, and me too
I don't know why you lost the battle when you promised not to lose

now when I look up towards the sky I know a piece is lost
I know inside one of those clouds is the silhouetted cost
I know that when I call for you, the only thing I'll hear
Is a spirit-broken echo that cuts me like a spear

did you ever stop and ask yourself what you were doing
did you ever think that maybe you could have a happy ending
did you put a gun to you soul and then did you pull the trigger
did you forget that I would miss you and your smile and your vigor
did you let go and free fall, knowing that no one could catch you
did you know that when you lost to life, that I lost too.
did you know that I lost you?

one bird had the best feathers, one was simply better
one bird was in a teardrop that I sent inside a letter
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Post by Blue Aqua Wind 4/21/2010, 10:40 pm

this is qreat,forry! ^.^
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Post by shadowsowner888 4/22/2010, 12:07 pm

^^ It's so good. And I think the formatting is epic!
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Post by Puckspaw 4/22/2010, 4:35 pm

Wow. Awesome job, Forry! I agree with Shadow, I love the formatting! nod
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Post by FOREIGN?! 4/22/2010, 5:12 pm

Thanks, everyone! :3
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Post by Novastare 4/22/2010, 11:31 pm

Wow!! Amazing!! Diffidently one of my favorites! I really feel like reading it over and over again. The first stanza was my fav.
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Post by DiscardedHarmony 4/27/2010, 4:27 pm

It's really really really really really beautiful. I adore it ♥️
The formatting is fine, I like how certain lines are larger; it adds emphasis. ;] I was singing it in my head while reading.
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