Chaos War

Chaos wars Fantasy:High- All Hyro Kell wants is to be left alone forgotten, he wants a simple job a simple life but the Gods have other plans for him. Before he knows what is going on he is forced into a war between the armies of the Dark god of Chaos and those who wish to preserve the balnce they have work thousands of years to create. Behind ememy lines another person is struggling with something he was forced into something that he didn't want anything to do with. A Dark robed man is struggling to fight both personal and real demons that have taken control of his body.

Ok be honest this is one of my first real story ideas and would love to have some advice on how to make it better.

To me, it sounds great already. :3 You've got all this conflict, and it sounds like a cool idea. I'm not really that good at critiquing ideas, though, so I'd probably have more to say if I were looking at the actual story . . . which I can't wait to see, assuming you'll be posting it on Twig. ^^

Thanks Ive already got a chapter done and am redoing my prologe to make it sound better

Ooh, this sounds interesting, which means it will probably be very good. It sounds like it could turn out very well, since your plan seems very clear.
Good luck!

I'm glad you liked the idea