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Just a dream

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Post by pirox_2012 7/13/2010, 10:24 am

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Is your smile just a dream,
when you look at me and your face gleams?

Are your eyes simply flames,
When you look at me do you feel shame?

Is your love non-existent?
Nothing about you is heaven sent.

If this is all a dream,
I want to wake up,
no longer to feel it's sting.
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Post by Komoda 7/13/2010, 9:46 pm

This is such a pretty poem, Pirox! You used really great metaphors. ^u^ I especially like:

Is your love non-existent?
Nothing about you is heaven sent
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Post by pirox_2012 7/15/2010, 12:08 am

Thanks, my favorite is the first line.
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