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My Knight In Shining Armor turned out to be a Loser in Aluminum Foil. [title to be figured out. xP]

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Post by Rai 7/14/2010, 4:10 pm

Maturity: I think its average, but correct me if I'm wrong, please. :3 It's about a girl talking about her ex-boyfriend who didn't love her back. xP
Fantasy: No unicorns or anything.



My Knight In Shining Armor turned out to be a Loser in Aluminum Foil.  [title to be figured out.  xP] Online-dating
--fROM aNOTHER vIEW--




Looking at myself
From another view
I see the mistake I made
When I met you

I thought I was in love
I thought that it was true
I can't believe I let myself
Give my heart to you

I gave myself so much hope
That you'd love me back
And realize who you loved
But that ability, you lack

I'd poured my hear out
In my private, beloved diary
About how much I loved you
My love for your inquiry

I loved you so much
More than you could know
You were my knight in shining armor
Yet you failed to glow

I didn't see that then
But I see it today
That you never really cared
Or ever gave me a bouquet

You didn't do anything
Yet I thought you gave the most
Your heart, your love
But you have the heart of a ghost

You're my biggest mistake
The worst one I've ever made
The lesson wasn't even worth learning
In this false love brigade

I'm going to forget you
And all we never had
But even though I hate you
The thought still makes me sad

But a broken heart can heal
It can heal easily
Especially when the other person
Didn't love me.




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Post by Komoda 7/14/2010, 11:46 pm

*-* This is amazing, Rai! ^^ I love the title. Great word choice in here, too. I love the 4th stanza especially. :3
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Post by Rai 7/15/2010, 12:34 pm

Thank you, Komoda! Very Happy
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Post by Puckspaw 7/15/2010, 3:10 pm

Really great job, Rai! I love it. =D
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Post by Rai 7/15/2010, 6:09 pm

Thanks Very Happy
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