Silent Rapture

by **Avé** 5/1/2010, 4:39 am

She'd love to hear what you'd say if you knew
That all these words had been wasted on you

Her blood-kissed hands that held your silent rapture
Her fingers lost the words that she failed to capture

Just seeing your face fills her mind with disgust
Apologize now, 'cause you've lost all her trust

You built her up strong, week after week
You let her fall down, you inglorious freak

Because of you, she can't wake up and say -
"You know, I don't feel like dying today."

by **Cyn431** 5/1/2010, 11:35 am

Ooh. Cyn likey. nod

Good job, Ave! I especially like the sad, bolded ending.

by **Komoda** 5/1/2010, 11:51 am

Wow, this is absolutely gorgeous Ave! *-* I especially like this verse...

Her blood-kissed hands that held your silent rapture
Her fingers lost the words that she failed to capture

Great job! (:

by **Avé** 5/1/2010, 5:35 pm

Why thank you. :3

Does anyone, by any chance, have any better ideas for a title?

by **shadowsowner888** 5/1/2010, 7:49 pm

Eeeek!

I totally totally love this, Avvy. The rhyming and rhythm are perfect!

I wanna call it Inglorious Freak, but that's just because I have the line stuck in my head now. xD