Moved ~~A second book by bookworm12 Please clcik and comment and read!
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Moved ~~A second book by bookworm12 Please clcik and comment and read!
by Amber 9/12/2009, 10:27 pm
Maturity rating- I cannot tell yet because I only wrote the protolog so far.
Fantasy rating- it is going to have a lot of Fantasy in it
Hi. This is my second and hopefully BEST book i ever wrote. Please read it and give citizen, or tell me if you like or dislike it. If you want me to let you know when new chapters come out let me know.
I am working on the spelling, and grammar
Fantasy rating- it is going to have a lot of Fantasy in it
Hi. This is my second and hopefully BEST book i ever wrote. Please read it and give citizen, or tell me if you like or dislike it. If you want me to let you know when new chapters come out let me know.
I am working on the spelling, and grammar
Moved
Proloue
Me And my brother Sherman Traveled from foster home to foster home, our mom Died from a car crash with a drunk driver, and then 2 months later our Dad Passed away from a heart attack.
Now we are leaving Mrs. Fords house, we stayed with her for 2 months, but then we through balloons full of moldy pudding off her roof at cars, hey we were just having some fun.
"You two Delinquents!" Mrs. Ford Yelled and Ranted
"Especially you Anne you, as a girl should not get involved in this type of thing!"
The next day she sends us to another place somewhere in California.
Proloue
Me And my brother Sherman Traveled from foster home to foster home, our mom Died from a car crash with a drunk driver, and then 2 months later our Dad Passed away from a heart attack.
Now we are leaving Mrs. Fords house, we stayed with her for 2 months, but then we through balloons full of moldy pudding off her roof at cars, hey we were just having some fun.
"You two Delinquents!" Mrs. Ford Yelled and Ranted
"Especially you Anne you, as a girl should not get involved in this type of thing!"
The next day she sends us to another place somewhere in California.
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Re: Moved ~~A second book by bookworm12 Please clcik and comment and read!
by shadowsowner888 9/13/2009, 9:07 am
I like it, but there's some capitalization and punctuation mistakes, and a few spelling errors that could be fixed. 
Also, you need to make sure you have the maturity and fantasy levels at the top. Anyway, I think it's a cool plot, and I hope you'll add more soon!
Also, you need to make sure you have the maturity and fantasy levels at the top. Anyway, I think it's a cool plot, and I hope you'll add more soon!
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by Amber 9/13/2009, 12:00 pm
uhh sorry i keep fogeting that i'm not texting sorry :-(
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by Boballoo123 9/13/2009, 12:15 pm
Lol, lately even in texts I've been using correct grammar and stuff, I just got so used to it. But anyway, good start, Amber.
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by Amber 9/13/2009, 12:21 pm
thanks i don't think i'm even going to continue the other one it was to boring.
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by Boballoo123 9/14/2009, 7:47 am
Okay oh and by the way... it's spelled Prologue not Protolog 
oh and by the way... it's spelled Prologue not Protolog
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by Amber 9/16/2009, 7:51 pm
oh
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by catbuster 9/24/2009, 4:46 pm
Nice one bookworm I like it sounds good so far.
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by Malicious Nightmares 9/24/2009, 4:57 pm
Good start.
But like Nadine, I too am begining to use proper grammar and so on, in texts. =/
But like Nadine, I too am begining to use proper grammar and so on, in texts. =/
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