Rejection ((Updated))

This is just a random poem. I was thinking about something like this for a few days, and while at school, I thought of a perfect one, but of course that was when I didn't have any paper to write on
I got a review on ReviewFuse, so I changed a few things Make sure to read it again!

Rejection
She walks
Up to him.
Her eyes dazed
On a whim.

She asks
And will wait
For the answer,
It comes late.

And she wonders
In the back of her head
What has she
Really said?

The boy laughs,
He doesn’t care,
Rolls his eyes,
But hers flare.

She walks away,
Tries to look unhurt,
But her tears
Begin to spurt.

The time
It seems to slow,
At that simple
Laughing “no”.

She wants to get away
She wants to hide
But her legs
Won’t move from her side.

And in the moment
She completely stops,
She hears the laughter,
Her heart is chopped.

Her tears drop
On the white tile,
And she looks down
For a while.

But then she notices
It’s not that bad,
Time speeds up
And she's not as sad.

That's really sad! It's the kind of scenario I'm scared of. XP

Thank you, Shadow
I'm very happy that I've never experienced anything like it before. But as my poem says, I guess that life would go on.

Yeah . . . it'd go on for me, after I was done being depressed. XD

That was amazing.

Thank you. I changed it, to make it work better

Hmm, nice.

Thanks, iGri. It's good to know that people like it here. On reviewfuse, on everything I write, I get these horrible reviews

That's probably from the experts who are way too tough on everyone else. Their standards are wayyyy too high. I think it's great!

Aww, thanks. The experts are really getting annoying, but I want to have my work get better so I have to stand strong and take it...
1/10 stars isn't that good, is it? Well, that's what I'm getting in many categories

You just aren't professional, but if you keep working harder, you might get some really nice poems in there.

Thanks
I'm just annoyed at being judged by professionals. Well, yea. I might write another poem later, we'll see how it goes.