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Post by xSophiexx16 2/7/2010, 8:58 pm

Death

When I look around a room
And I see nobody there.
I try to talk to him.
But then I end up nowhere.

So, when I look around myself.
And I see nothing around.
I try to go back to somewhere.
Where I can see or hear a sound.

I stretch my eyes open wide
And I try to make some sense.
But my eyes won’t let me see
As the air quickly turns dense.

I choke on the air
And my mind becomes fogged.
My lungs tear.
And I can’t go on for long.

A cold breeze passes through me
And my skin covers in bumps.
I fall back into black nothingness.
And my heart no longer thumps.

I feel something envelope me
And I try not to feel any dread.
Then something tells me.
That I am now dead.
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Post by Avé 2/7/2010, 9:53 pm

Sophie, this is beautiful. Very... suspensful. nod
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Post by shadowsowner888 2/7/2010, 9:58 pm

Yikes! That poem speaks. It speaks, it simply does. nod (Entirely a good thing. :3)
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Post by xSophiexx16 2/7/2010, 11:31 pm

Thank you both (:
I had much trouble making a poem and this was the only one where the words came to me, you know? So... yeah. x)
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