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Post by Rai 7/12/2010, 2:01 pm

Maturity: High, death.
Fantasy: Average? High? This has never happened to me, nor anyone I know.



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This is goodbye, Daddy, ain't it?
This is the end, right?
I need some wings: I'm gonna take flight.
Does it hurt to die, Daddy?

No, it doesn't, son.
You won't die: everything'll be fine.
Everything is just divine.
You won't die: I promise.

You're lying, Daddy.
I know I'm gonna die
And to Heaven I'll fly
I promise it'll be okay.

No, you will not die.
You're good and strong.
Here, on earth, is where you belong.
You'll live, son.

Daddy, don't be afraid.
I'll always be in your heart, your place.
Daddy, I can see God's face!
I feel so much better.

Son! Look away!
You're going to live, I promise.
No! Don't leave me, Thomas.
I love you so much.

It's alright, I'm okay.
Daddy, I love you, too.
But I gotta go: God said I do.
But I'll always be with you.

Son, please don't go.
Just hold on a little longer.
I promise, son, you'll get stronger.
You'll feel better soon.

Daddy, I feel better now.
I've got to go, it's what I have to do.
But always remember that I love you.
And that I'll be alright.



With his father knelt at the side of the hospital bed,
Thomas softly kissed his daddy's forehead.
And with that final ounce of strength gone,
Thomas knew his job was done.
God needed him up in Heaven now
For staying here, God wouldn't allow.
So Thomas laid back on his bed.
And his father knew that Thomas was dead.






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Post by Komoda 7/12/2010, 2:38 pm

Aww, this is so beautiful. It's sad, yet really sweet. Great job, Rai.
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Post by Rai 7/12/2010, 2:46 pm

Thank you, Komoda. Very Happy

I think I've finally started to rid myself of my wb. Thank goodness... it feels good not to rhyme "sweaty" with "spaghetti." XDDD
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Post by Johnny Gal 7/12/2010, 9:11 pm

i love this! its sooo good... i think its my fav that you have written!!! ^^
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Post by Novastare 7/13/2010, 12:08 am

Beautiful and sad, my favorite!! Loved it, sad poems are amazing, you did a lovely job with this.
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Post by Puckspaw 7/13/2010, 2:27 am

Great job, Rai! This is lovely. nod
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Post by Rai 7/13/2010, 4:55 pm

Johnny: Thanks so much! Very Happy I'm glad you liked it! :3

Nova: Awe, thank you so much. Very Happy

Pucks: Thanks!!! Smile

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Post by Rai 7/18/2010, 6:22 pm

It's time for me to be pushy and irritating. XD
Does anyone else like it? 83
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Post by Avé 7/18/2010, 7:16 pm

Rai, this is absolutely amazing. Beautiful job. :')
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Post by Rai 7/18/2010, 7:22 pm

Thanks so much, Ave. :3
Ergh, how do you do that little apostrophe at the top of the 'e?' XDDD I cannot seem to figure that out... >.<
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Post by Mooniepie 7/18/2010, 7:29 pm

Great job. And you put num lock on, press and hold ALT, and then on the side number pad, type 130...

I really like that poem. :]
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Post by Rai 7/18/2010, 7:31 pm

Thanks, Szam! Very Happy
Thanks again for showing me how to do the 'é.' XD
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Post by Avé 7/18/2010, 10:55 pm

Rai wrote:Thanks so much, Ave. :3
Ergh, how do you do that little apostrophe at the top of the 'e?' XDDD I cannot seem to figure that out... >.<
You're welcome. ^^
Meh. I never knew. I just copy and paste. XD Call me Avvy, though. Or just Ave. Don't mind the... -copies- é.
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Post by Rai 7/19/2010, 10:30 am

:3
Oh, lol. XD
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