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Post by Jesus4Eternity 6/11/2009, 1:59 pm

I don't know what to call this, but it's a random idea I had! Anyway.....



I walked into the line, sniffling occasionally. I was just getting over a recent cold, but I didn't care. I was about to meet Jackson Rathbone.
A cold wind blew towards us, and I sneezed. Why, of all days, did I have to be sick now? The line moved up slightly, and I took a step forward, acidentally running into the girl in front of me.
"Oh! I'm sorry!" My nasaly voice apologized. "That's fine." The girl turned around. Her mouth was turned up in a smile. "I'm Allison." She laughed. "Amanda." I replied, sniffling. "Are you alright? You seem sick." Her voice sounded concerned. "Yeah, I'm fine. Just a cold. You're sounding like Jasper. Protective." I laughed. "Well, you just acted like Bella." She replied. "Fine, we're even." I coughed twice, and we kept the conversation going.




Is it good?


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Post by iGrievous 6/11/2009, 2:15 pm

we have to judge one sentence?
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Post by Jesus4Eternity 6/11/2009, 2:18 pm

Three sentences. And I added more. Smile
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Post by iGrievous 6/11/2009, 2:29 pm

Yah, I guess it is pretty good.
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Post by shadowsowner888 6/11/2009, 3:12 pm

Good job! Very Happy I like it so far.
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Post by Jesus4Eternity 6/11/2009, 3:18 pm

Of course it would be Jackson for me. Smile
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Post by Jesus4Eternity 6/15/2009, 9:05 pm

Guys, I'm closing this for personal reasons. I may open it/make a new thread later.
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