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Post by Arianna 10/17/2009, 10:48 am

Maturity: None
Fantasy: None

In a world with no colors
It's all black and white
There's nothing to do at day
It's pitch-black at night.

In a world with no colors
Your friends can't be found
'Cause where ever you look,
They blend in with the crowd.

Without colors everything is dark and dreary
Without red, anger's gone
When green leaves, your happiness goes with it
And when blue's gone you can't sing a sad song.

The world is full of colors
Purple, orange, blue
Without a daily dose of colors
You'd have no feelings and nothing to do.

Be happy we don't live in a world
Where there's just black white and grey
Because if we're without colors, we're without feelings
And reasons to keep sad thoughts at bay

((I know it could be better. Constructive critism, please?))
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Post by shadowsowner888 10/17/2009, 11:47 am

That creeps me out. I'm like, "Augh! No colors?! o.0" Great job! xD
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Post by Arianna 10/17/2009, 12:07 pm

Thanks, Shadow!
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Post by littletoes101 10/17/2009, 12:16 pm

Wow. This poem tells me alot about stuff! I like this poem
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Post by rattyjol 10/17/2009, 5:33 pm

Awesome! Very Happy
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Post by DiscardedHarmony 11/10/2009, 4:19 pm

Yeah, I agree with Shadow; creepy! But well written. Um, constructive...it could have been a bit longer to develop some of your ideas a bit more? But overall; me likey! (:
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