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Post by Komoda 11/8/2009, 1:08 am

Okay, so this began as a poem but Shadow pointed out that it could be a rap song...
So, I found that it went well with the beat of California by Undead. So right now, I'm working on it so that it will flow nicely with the beat then I'll record it. Whoot!

Maturity: Not really. It may sound lovey dovey, but it's really about friendship. I swear.

Fantasy: Naww...

Risk

She makes me laugh so hard I cry
The time we spend together seems to fly
My best friend; I'm there for her like she is for me
She does stupid things, I forgive her instantly

But those things she does, they cut me deep
Sometimes I can't breathe; I can't get to sleep
She makes me cry more than I've ever cried before
I may not show it, but no one has hurt me more

But that's the risk I have to take
Friendship isn't perfect; it can break
And once it does, it will never be the same
In the back of my mind, she'll always hold the blame

She's talking lies straight to my face
She tries to hide it with a little embrace
I always forgive, but I never forget
Because her actions repeat like an overplayed cassette

I don't know why I let her push me around
I let her manipulate me like a toy that's wound
I don't know why I continue to believe her
When her lies should be obvious to even a stranger

But she's always been my closest friend
It's a risk I'm willing to take to the end
You may think I'm foolish, and you're probably right
But ending this isn't worth the fight

Yeah, she hardly listens to a word I say
Yeah, she'll swear at me playfully, shove me away
But that's her loss, one day she'll come around
But by then I'll be gone and will never be found




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Post by shadowsowner888 11/8/2009, 9:47 am

Awww. Sad *huggles Mo* This is about Mal?

I liked it so far, anyway. :3 This stanza, for some reason, I pictured Hollywood Undead singing. xD I think it's my favorite one . . .

She lies to my face
Tries to hide it with an embrace
I always forgive, but I never forget
Because her actions repeat like an overplayed cassette
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Post by Komoda 11/8/2009, 11:33 am

Yeah. Sad And all my other friends, really.

Aw, thanks!! Yay, I sound like HU! :DD
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Post by shadowsowner888 11/8/2009, 3:20 pm

Aww. Sad I'm sorry.

Actually, maybe the better word woulda been rapping. xDD Cus that's what I was picturing.
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Post by littletoes101 11/8/2009, 4:30 pm

Aww. I don't have alot of friends, either.
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Post by Komoda 11/8/2009, 4:59 pm

S'Alright. Very Happy

Zomg, yes!! I should totally rap this. XPP

Ah, we'll find good RL friends eventually, Little. :3
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Post by littletoes101 11/8/2009, 5:04 pm

I'll be your friend for now...
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Post by Komoda 11/8/2009, 5:13 pm

Aw, thanks. :3

Haha, I found the perfect background beat for this. Very Happy Now I just need to like rap it out and upload it... Hee hee.
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Post by littletoes101 11/8/2009, 5:14 pm

Cool.
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Post by rattyjol 11/8/2009, 7:54 pm

That's amazing. I'm sorry you feel that way, though. Sad I don't have any RL friends that I see a lot either, but that's because they all move away. XP
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Post by Komoda 11/8/2009, 7:58 pm

Thanks! And aw, I know how you feel. A lot of my friends have moved away on me, too.
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Post by shadowsowner888 11/9/2009, 7:17 pm

OMG. Very Happy Are you actually gonna record this?
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Post by LuckyPenny666 11/9/2009, 10:08 pm

This is really good! It would be cool if ou recorded this! Very Happy
I know how you guys feel too. Sad a lot of my friends have moved away, and some of them ditched me because I wasn't "cool" enough.
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Post by Komoda 11/10/2009, 10:31 am

Haha, heck yes!!

Thanks! :3

Aw, I'm sorry. Sad Hopefully you will find some friends that will realize how cool you are. :3
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