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Liquid Velvet Steals A Life

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Post by Akeria 2/15/2010, 9:27 pm

Night creeps upon me,
Like liquid velvet,
Lulling my sub-conscience,
Lulling me deeper into sleep.
Darkness employs me blindly,
My brain a lively riot,
A state of uncanny brilliance,
Pulling me so deep.

Uncertain I am,
Where are they right now?
As my heart begins to slam,
To find them I fully vow.
Save me from my misery,
Liveliness so steadily,
Creeping on my insides,
Showing on my outsides.

Writhing as my heart stops,
A steady beat that ceases,
Sent into anaphylactic shock,
My eyes rolling back.
Blood spreads on the black top
Of my sub-conscience, bleeding
Into the deep airlock
Of oxygen departing, I'm under attack.

Uncertain I am,
Where are they right now?
As my heart begins to slam,
To find my way back I fully vow.
Save me from my misery,
Liveliness so steadily,
Creeping on my insides,
Showing on my outsides.

Losing feeling from my fingers,
Blood creeping away from my toes.
Rushing to my heart.
Trying to save it.
Too much too fast, a thousand blisters.
The faint beating of my heart echoes.
Pulling each artery and vein apart,
Sending each cell into a fit.

Uncertain I am,
Where are they right now?
As my heart begins to slam,
To find the light I fully vow.
Save me from my misery,
Liveliness so steadily,
Creeping on my insides,
Showing on my outsides.
Too far gone,
Something is wrong.
They've made a mistake,
One they can't remake,
Taken my life away,
A procedure gone astray.
A life that used to be strong,
Taken by a surgery gone wrong.

The idea is that it's a surgery gone wrong, and this is what the patient goes through as they die.


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Post by PugsRock 2/15/2010, 9:28 pm

Aw, that's sad. And depressing. But really good. Smile
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Post by FOREIGN?! 2/15/2010, 9:39 pm

Wow, that was intense. Very sad and gripping, I loved it. nod
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Post by Akeria 2/15/2010, 10:05 pm

Thank you, Pugs.

And you too, foreign. Smile
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Post by shadowsowner888 2/15/2010, 11:39 pm

Inteeeeense. Very Happy That's talent there!
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Post by Akeria 2/16/2010, 8:39 am

Very Happy Thank you.
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Post by Akeria 2/19/2010, 6:47 pm

*Hates to bump this*
I changed the last line a bit.
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Post by Snow 2/19/2010, 7:00 pm

Absolutely brilliant! cheesy
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Post by Akeria 2/20/2010, 7:53 am

Thanks snow. Smile
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