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A Simple and my first freewrite: Animal inside,

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Post by Novastare 4/12/2010, 7:58 pm



Animal, Animal, what do you see?
see the depts of my bleeding heart?
See down,
Down,
Down,
To the depts of the raging sea,
Going far,
Far,
Far away from what used to be.

Animal you want out?
Rage burning into my soul I'll let you out.
I'll let the fire consume me deep,
Till theres nothing left but you,

Going up,
Up,
Up,
To the bodies cure,
Sailing far
Far,
Far to the north.

Till once at last they'll feel my pain,
Animal's coming to make my pain known.
Fire burning deep inside,
Rage is coming to make you understand.

Animal is Waiting,
Waiting,
Waiting,
Wait no more!
Flying,
Flying,
Fly to the shore.

I hear him burst now from his ship,
From my body fire burns and sinks their ships.
Till nobody is left,
They run and hide.

I hear them screaming,
Screaming,
Screaming,
Screaming to take them away,
Unleashing,
Unleashing,
Unleashing their animal stay,

Burning fire everywhere,
Fighting animals upon animals,
Now everyones hurt,
Now everyones gone......

If only,
Only,
Only,
Only talking did not begin,
Then,
Then,
Then animal would have stayed in.

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Post by Fareorn 4/12/2010, 8:05 pm

Whoa... It's powerful. Great work Nova. Reminds of the song "Animal I have Become."

But like I said, fantastic work!
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 4/12/2010, 8:06 pm

Amazing! 8D

Oooh! Animal I Have Become!! cheesy

Erm. Back on topic. Sorry.

Wonderful poem! nod
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Post by Fareorn 4/12/2010, 8:52 pm

Hahaha! Yes, Mia. Three Days Grace. Animal I have Become.
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Post by Novastare 4/12/2010, 9:18 pm

Thanks!! Thats where I got my inspiration , Smile I should have metiont that before I guess. It makes me want to listen to it again. Very Happy Now I'm gonna need to look it up, lol.
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Post by shadowsowner888 4/12/2010, 9:49 pm

Oooooh. *-* I totally love this, Nova. The formatting gives it a great touch!
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Post by Novastare 4/12/2010, 11:15 pm

Thanks Shadow!! I was going to do color changes for rage, but that would take forever. Razz
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 4/13/2010, 6:04 pm

Animal I Have Become is a great song for inspiration, indeed! XD
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Post by Fareorn 4/13/2010, 8:18 pm

Too true. A lot of songs can be used for inspiration. My short story, A Storm in Time was inspired by Linkin Park's New Divide.
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 4/13/2010, 8:23 pm

Almost every song can be inspirational, really. nod

[[Any bloody/freaky/metal song can inspire me. Somehow. XD]]
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Post by Novastare 4/14/2010, 7:06 pm

True that, true that, lol. Yeah, for me it would be country ballads and depressing stuff. For some reason, it gets me in a writing mood, happy songs give me writers block. Surprised
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