The Garden [Finished] *Title Change*

I don't even know if I'll ever go anywhere with this, so don't be surprised if you never see another piece of story besides this, but it's my first attempt to write in third person. xP So anyways, here it is!!!

Things have been changed around. I'm going to be focusing a lot on BTW so I'm changing this to a short story!

This story is based on Genesis 3, so if you don't know what's going on, I recommend you read it!

The Fall
3:1 Now the serpent was more crafty than any other beast of the field that the Lord God had made.

He said to the woman, “Did God actually say, ‘You [1] shall not eat of any tree in the garden’?” 2 And the woman said to the serpent, “We may eat of the fruit of the trees in the garden, 3 but God said, ‘You shall not eat of the fruit of the tree that is in the midst of the garden, neither shall you touch it, lest you die.’” 4 But the serpent said to the woman, “You will not surely die. 5 For God knows that when you eat of it your eyes will be opened, and you will be like God, knowing good and evil.” 6 So when the woman saw that the tree was good for food, and that it was a delight to the eyes, and that the tree was to be desired to make one wise, [2] she took of its fruit and ate, and she also gave some to her husband who was with her, and he ate. 7 Then the eyes of both were opened, and they knew that they were naked. And they sewed fig leaves together and made themselves loincloths.

8 And they heard the sound of the Lord God walking in the garden in the cool [3] of the day, and the man and his wife hid themselves from the presence of the Lord God among the trees of the garden. 9 But the Lord God called to the man and said to him, “Where are you?” [4] 10 And he said, “I heard the sound of you in the garden, and I was afraid, because I was naked, and I hid myself.” 11 He said, “Who told you that you were naked? Have you eaten of the tree of which I commanded you not to eat?” 12 The man said, “The woman whom you gave to be with me, she gave me fruit of the tree, and I ate.” 13 Then the Lord God said to the woman, “What is this that you have done?” The woman said, “The serpent deceived me, and I ate.”

14 The Lord God said to the serpent,

“Because you have done this,
cursed are you above all livestock
and above all beasts of the field;
on your belly you shall go,
and dust you shall eat
all the days of your life.
15 I will put enmity between you and the woman,
and between your offspring [5] and her offspring;
he shall bruise your head,
and you shall bruise his heel.”

16 To the woman he said,

“I will surely multiply your pain in childbearing;
in pain you shall bring forth children.
Your desire shall be for [6] your husband,
and he shall rule over you.”

17 And to Adam he said,

“Because you have listened to the voice of your wife
and have eaten of the tree
of which I commanded you,
‘You shall not eat of it,’
cursed is the ground because of you;
in pain you shall eat of it all the days of your life;
18 thorns and thistles it shall bring forth for you;
and you shall eat the plants of the field.
19 By the sweat of your face
you shall eat bread,
till you return to the ground,
for out of it you were taken;
for you are dust,
and to dust you shall return.”

20 The man called his wife's name Eve, because she was the mother of all living. [7] 21 And the Lord God made for Adam and for his wife garments of skins and clothed them.

22 Then the Lord God said, “Behold, the man has become like one of us in knowing good and evil. Now, lest he reach out his hand and take also of the tree of life and eat, and live forever—” 23 therefore the Lord God sent him out from the garden of Eden to work the ground from which he was taken. 24 He drove out the man, and at the east of the garden of Eden he placed the cherubim and a flaming sword that turned every way to guard the way to the tree of life.


The Garden

Long before it was sun-baked and parched, a lush garden resided on the flat, open land. The dark sky was illuminated only by the twinkling points of light known as stars to humans and it was a seemingly cloudless night with only faint gray wisps far in the distance. The dense fir trees filled the garden with the fresh aroma of crushed pine needles and all the animals were laid to rest among the branches of the trees, buried in their burrows underground, or nestled inside the cozy tree trunks. Farther towards the heart of the garden, fruit trees abounded. Their leaves cast a silvery glow as they reflected the beams of the moon and their branches were laden heavy, dipping low to the ground, with the multiple fruit they bore on them. Adorning their leafy branches as well, there were brightly colored flowers of all colors: red, purple, green, blue, pink, orange, and even yellow.

Near the middle though, yes, near the middle of the garden grew two trees. They were the most beautiful trees in the whole entire garden. They were by far the largest and most stunning there. One was a shimmery silver color, all by itself without the moon. In fact it looked as if it was made of moonbeams its self. It even glowed radiantly, a silver aura surrounding it seemingly. Next to it shone a tree as splendid as if it was intricately carved by the finest craftsman from pure gold. It too was glowing innocently, as if it did not know that the fall of mankind would be through it.

The sun rose high into the blue sky, even higher than the fluffy white clouds, bathing the land in its soft golden rays. The birds resumed their merry chirping, the squirrels resumed their nut gathering, and the lions resumed indulging on berries, yes berries, rather than meat. And the two trees still stood erect in the garden as the snake slithered up one of their trunks.

And the tree glowed as the woman reached out with her slender hand, and gently plucked one of its shimmery fruits. It glowed brilliantly as she took a bite out of its fruit. And the tree glowed even more magnificently as the man as well, ate the flesh of the fruit. And as mankind realized their sin for the first time, and as God banished them from the garden, and as the angels with their flaming swords flashing back and forth to guard the entrance to the garden, protected the tree, it still glowed. And it glowed and glowed. It glowed far after mankind was gone from its presence. And it still glows today in the secret place where it is hidden away along with its brother tree. Hidden away from mankind.

Ooh, I really like this! It's great! Very descriptive.

Lol, prologues never make sense, anyways. XP

Haha, nice! Well it's a really good start. XP

You're welcome!

That's okay. XP I'm sure other religions have a version of Adam and Eve, too. And if not, it wouldn't hurt them to learn about it.

Ya that's true. It's good that they learn! Lol.

Do you think I should put an announcement at the top explaining it?

Sure!

K. I'm on an iPhone now but when I get home I'll go do that!

Oh yay! This one! Love it.

Awesome!

Ooh, I remember this from your snippets thread! More?

DreamCatcher81 wrote:Anyone who's not Christian probably won't know what it's about though. . . xD

Actually, I'm Jewish and it's a major part of our bible too. XD

Ooh, that was rather educational. ^^
I didn't know they got in that much trouble. I thought their lovely garden just kinda disappeared.
But ouch.
Thanks Eve, now it will suck to have children. XP

Ikr, Mo. xP I mean, I can live with the rest, but c'mon. It's not fair that we have to go through torture just to populate the world! xP

XP I agree with both of you guys.

Maybe us women should just go on strike. We could just not have children until God agrees to take away the pain.

Wait... Bad idea. XD