Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
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Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 1:44 pm
Surge
"Now put the car in reverse." She told me. Her voice was cool... Very easy to undertand, and to read. I could feel the pulse of the car in the wheel, vibrating, almost. I pushed my right foot down on the brake and put the car into reverse.
"Good." My mother said.
"Nice job, Keri." My little brother told me from the backseat. I ignored him and looked backwards, out the window in the back. I slid my foot off the brake and backed the car to the right. I braked, and put it in drive. Finally, I lifted my foot off the brake and pushed on the gas, causing the car to lurch forward.
I controlled the enormous silver beast as I drove it around the circular part of our street, and then down the street to the stop sign.
"Where am I going to turn around?" I asked as I stopped gently.
"Turn right and drive to the High School." My mother said.
"But... there are people there!" I told her. "What if I hurt someone?" She smiled at me.
"Akeria, you're not going to hurt anyone. Drive." I listened and pushed on the gas as I turned the wheel right. The car moved. The feeling that you were in control was amazing. I pushed on it a little harder and then turned right into the high school parking lot.
I felt a wave of relief as I saw that there were no cars there.
"Drive that way." My mother said, pointing. I followed her instructions with increasing ease. Driving wasn't that hard. "Good. Now turn that way, and go back the way you came."
Piece of cake.
I continued the way I was going, then turned left around a tree and went back.
"Park over there. That space, under the tree." My mom pointed. Parking? I had just learned to make the thing go!
"Uh... okay..." I said. I pulled into the parking spot. Perfectly.
"Amazing! You're dead on!" My mother said. She touched my hand gently to calm me down. My heart was still going wild.
"Now, back out, to the right, and drive home." She said.
I did it. The power, the feeling of driving is something you can't beat. Seriously, it's a surge of adrenelin, and emotions all at the same time. Driving that enormous metal box around a street where there are other enormous metal boxes, is nuts, but it's thrilling. I loved it. I loved the surge of energy, the rush of feelings you get, and the power at the tips of your fingers and the push of a petal.
I realized it today, but I love driving.
"Now put the car in reverse." She told me. Her voice was cool... Very easy to undertand, and to read. I could feel the pulse of the car in the wheel, vibrating, almost. I pushed my right foot down on the brake and put the car into reverse.
"Good." My mother said.
"Nice job, Keri." My little brother told me from the backseat. I ignored him and looked backwards, out the window in the back. I slid my foot off the brake and backed the car to the right. I braked, and put it in drive. Finally, I lifted my foot off the brake and pushed on the gas, causing the car to lurch forward.
I controlled the enormous silver beast as I drove it around the circular part of our street, and then down the street to the stop sign.
"Where am I going to turn around?" I asked as I stopped gently.
"Turn right and drive to the High School." My mother said.
"But... there are people there!" I told her. "What if I hurt someone?" She smiled at me.
"Akeria, you're not going to hurt anyone. Drive." I listened and pushed on the gas as I turned the wheel right. The car moved. The feeling that you were in control was amazing. I pushed on it a little harder and then turned right into the high school parking lot.
I felt a wave of relief as I saw that there were no cars there.
"Drive that way." My mother said, pointing. I followed her instructions with increasing ease. Driving wasn't that hard. "Good. Now turn that way, and go back the way you came."
Piece of cake.
I continued the way I was going, then turned left around a tree and went back.
"Park over there. That space, under the tree." My mom pointed. Parking? I had just learned to make the thing go!
"Uh... okay..." I said. I pulled into the parking spot. Perfectly.
"Amazing! You're dead on!" My mother said. She touched my hand gently to calm me down. My heart was still going wild.
"Now, back out, to the right, and drive home." She said.
I did it. The power, the feeling of driving is something you can't beat. Seriously, it's a surge of adrenelin, and emotions all at the same time. Driving that enormous metal box around a street where there are other enormous metal boxes, is nuts, but it's thrilling. I loved it. I loved the surge of energy, the rush of feelings you get, and the power at the tips of your fingers and the push of a petal.
I realized it today, but I love driving.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Jade 8/25/2009, 1:47 pm
That's so cool, I assume you're learning to drive right now! That's awesome 
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 1:49 pm
Yeppers. 
It's hard, but I do love it... honestly. I think it's just the fact that I'm still uncomfortable that makes it hard... Obviously I have no trouble with the tactics. I can park now.
It's hard, but I do love it... honestly. I think it's just the fact that I'm still uncomfortable that makes it hard... Obviously I have no trouble with the tactics. I can park now.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Arianna 8/25/2009, 2:05 pm
Wow, that's cool So you can drive? That's awesome!
So you can drive? That's awesome!
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 2:07 pm
Ish... I'm learning. I don't have my permit or anything yet though. I can't get it until I turn 16... which is next year...
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Arianna 8/25/2009, 3:02 pm
Yep, well you can drive, you just don't have a drivers' license. 
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 3:05 pm
Yes. I can, but it's not legal.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 3:19 pm
Schmankies! I like yours and Arianna's too! XD
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by twilighter3000 8/25/2009, 3:23 pm
That's like almost identicle to what I would have wrote about learning to drive! [Although I'm 12, so I have to wait like 3 more years] 'Cept I didn't get to go anywhere except around the high school parking lot, and it was my dad---But other than that, evething's like identicle! lol!
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by iGrievous 8/25/2009, 4:42 pm
I love driving my dad's Ranger
boat, it's so much fun being in control like that! I'm a little nervous about how I'm gonna have to drive a car someday, because there's a lot more chances of getting in an accident that way.
boat, it's so much fun being in control like that! I'm a little nervous about how I'm gonna have to drive a car someday, because there's a lot more chances of getting in an accident that way.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 4:50 pm
True, but it's cool knowing you have the ability to drive.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by shadowsowner888 8/25/2009, 6:00 pm
I liked reading that, Keri! x3 And I'm jealous. Lawl, I love driving, too. But I freak if I go too fast - from experience in boats - and I've never driven a car more than about a hundred feet. xP (They made me pull it out to the road when we went on vacation x3.)
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 8/25/2009, 8:40 pm
I don't like going fast. XD
Though, at one point (I didn't mention this in the story) when I was on the way back home, we were going down the hill on the way, and I ended up going like 20mph because the car was rolling and I had put my foot on the gas a little more than usual... o.O
My mom freaked out, and so I stopped. XD
Though, at one point (I didn't mention this in the story) when I was on the way back home, we were going down the hill on the way, and I ended up going like 20mph because the car was rolling and I had put my foot on the gas a little more than usual... o.O
My mom freaked out, and so I stopped. XD
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by shadowsowner888 8/26/2009, 7:11 am
Nice. xD I never went very fast at all - couldn't have been faster than fifteen miles or so in the boat. So you beat me out.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Komoda 8/26/2009, 2:01 pm
I love this! It's very well written. It really has me more excited than nervous about driving, now. I can't wait to drive, actually. 'Cause then I'll be able to go places...
It really has me more excited than nervous about driving, now. I can't wait to drive, actually. 'Cause then I'll be able to go places...
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Taquito 9/19/2009, 1:35 pm
I like it. I'm way to young to drive. xD
Actually I just have to wait 4 years.
Actually I just have to wait 4 years.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by PugsRock 9/20/2009, 9:05 am
Wow, you start learning to drive at 15? Not around here. xD Nice story, though. I like it.
I like it.
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Re: Surge - A Microfiction (A True Story)
by Akeria 9/20/2009, 9:58 am
My mom wants me to be able to drive before I start drivers ed...
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