Jealousy (I added more!)

Maturity: Low
Fantasy: It's not really true. It was supposed to be, but it's not. xD Some parts are.

Jealousy

Cold wind blows my dreams away
Melting in the light of day
My temperature starts to rise
As you look into her eyes

Jealousy is a perpetual fever
Comes back to you like a golden retriever
Running away just makes it come nearer
But as hard as I try, I can never see clearer

Becomes of them, I antagonize my life
As his words slowly turns into knives
Knives used to stab me in the back
Giving me a panic attack

The girl he loves was once my friend
Forever and ever always has to end
Even though it's over, why is he still in my mind?
Asking questions with answers I'll never find

This is one of my favorite poems I've written. Thanks, Shadow, for helping me! (:

It's really good so far! I like how you used a lot of symbolism.

Ooh, I like it so far! Like Lucky, I like all the symbolism in it.

Try going here: http://www.rhymezone.com/
It'll help you find a rhyme for the last line.
(Hey, that rhymed! XP)

I know rhymes, I just don't know how I should use one there. LOL But thanks.

Ooo, I like it!

I can try helping ya with that last line . . . you need anything in particular? xD Or will a bunch of lines having anything to do with this work?

Thanks!
I don't need anything in particular. xD

Mkay, let's see . . .

But as hard as I try, I can never see clearer

I think that's all I've got right now. xD

Thanks! At first, I had: Life copies nightmares like a mirror

But I didn't think that it went well. xD

Should I end it here or write more?

Awesome.

OMG. xD You actually used my suggestion! I never saw that, lol.

Awesome job. :3 If you were to end it here, I think it'd be a good ending! (I love that "forever and ever always has to end" line, btw. )

Yep! I liked your suggestion.

Okay, I'll end it here. xD (Thanks. I love that line, too, cause it's true.)