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REALIZE ( better title, anyone? o.e )

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Post by FOREIGN?! 3/11/2010, 5:18 pm

Er... This is a poem. ENJOY!

    I’m sorry, please know that I mean it
    But there are some things I have to let you know
    I’ve been holding all this back for so long
    I’m sick of just going along with the flow

    That stormy day on that beautiful beach
    Might as well be the best day I’ve ever had
    ‘Cause when I looked at you through the wind and rain
    Something in me knew that you were looking back

    One day you have probably forgotten
    In the library, fighting with caps off of pens
    I couldn’t have been made any happier
    In that moment we seemed like more than friends

    It’s hard for me to admit this, you know,
    After all the opportunities I have missed
    My final confession before I leave
    I hope you don’t try to resist

    And all those uncountable seconds
    When you burned me up with your beautiful eyes
    Where you took my breathe away with one smile
    I love you a little, I wish you would realize.


Yeah, this is a really personal one, if you could tell. ´-´
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Post by Jesus 3/11/2010, 7:54 pm

That's really cute. And sad...and...I love it. Smile You did an amazing job. But I'm sorry to say I don't have any title ideas.
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Post by FOREIGN?! 3/12/2010, 9:55 am

Thanks! (:
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Post by xSophiexx16 3/12/2010, 4:01 pm

That's really pretty. x) It made me smile.


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Post by Puckspaw 3/12/2010, 4:07 pm

Really great job! I love reading your poems. Very Happy I was thinking 'I Love You A Little' for a title, but that's kinda cheesy. I think I like 'Realize' better.
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Post by shadowsowner888 3/12/2010, 4:19 pm

Aww, that's so sweet. *sigh* x3 Great job, Forry.

I think Realize is a good name! :O Or Final Confession.
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Post by FOREIGN?! 3/12/2010, 8:35 pm

Thanks, everyone! Very Happy
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 3/18/2010, 2:42 pm

Usually this isn't my kind of poem.. but.. wow. You've amazed me, Forry! smiley Beautiful, as I didn't think I'd ever say. XD Anyways.. awesome. I'll admit that you made.. me.. smile. O,o *GASP* Oh no. I wrote 'GAS!' before.. by accident. XD
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Post by FOREIGN?! 3/18/2010, 3:17 pm

I made Mia smile? O.O I must have some sort of hidden powers! Hehe, just kiddin'. Thanks! Very Happy
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 3/18/2010, 3:20 pm

Lawl. X3

You're welcome!
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Post by Avé 3/18/2010, 3:32 pm

This is really pretty, Forrey. <3 About Chad, I assume?
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