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love oh, such a deathly thing.

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Post by Novastare 4/14/2010, 7:41 pm

(( Not really one of my better ones, I had writers block ))
Whats this? The death bell ring,
Oh love, such an aweful thing.
Pity those who love with all their heart,
For crying will be the easiest part.
After that, the tears turn grey,
And happyness grows farther and farther away.
Till love at last is all you know,
Windows with weeds that overgrow.
Till at last your pain turns into death,
And you love till your very finale breath.
Why oh why, did I love a fool?
Oh love, it's just so cruel.

Oh love, such a graceful thing,
When hearts sound drums and angels sing.
When at last you come to see them as more,
When happiness first knocks on the door.
When november nights turn to june days,
When you think that he will love always.
And love so true to always bring,
Ah, love, such a happy thing

Then your bell at last to ring
Love, oh, such a sad and lonely thing.
Then you see it was all a trick,
And love comes again like a useless brick.
Build it up, just to fall,
On the floor, you try and crawl.
But no escape your feet find,
Why was your love so awefully blind.
To love a thing so hard and cold,
Why was your heart so bold?
Till at last you think to yourself,
Was that the same book I put on my shelf?
And at last come, the horrid bell ring,
Oh love, such a deathly thing.


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Post by shadowsowner888 4/14/2010, 10:45 pm

I like it, I really do. :3 It's so . . . meaningful. Deep.
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Post by Novastare 4/14/2010, 11:20 pm

Thanks, Razz Yeah, not really that great, Writers block is mean!!! I'm just out of my writing mood for some reason..... Sad
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Post by shadowsowner888 4/14/2010, 11:52 pm

Uh-uh, it is great! nod But as for your writers block . . . just give yourself time. ^^ It'll go away eventually, and if all else fails, try writing about writers block!
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Post by xSophiexx16 4/15/2010, 12:05 am

This is great. I very much like it! I believe there are some spelling mistakes, like 'happyness' should be 'happiness.'
I really like it! It's very nice. (:

(I also think "a aweful thing" is supposed to be 'an awful thing'
Sorry, I'm probably bothering you, but I felt I should tell you.)
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Post by Novastare 4/15/2010, 12:48 pm

Lol, thanks Shadow, I'll try that! Smile

Oh, thanks Sophie, yeah spelling mistakes a lot of the time are not on purpose, but my computer is really slow so I'm too concentrated on that to realize I've done something wrong. I'll try and fix those, thanks bunches!! Razz
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