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Should've Told Me Sooner

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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/25/2010, 10:06 pm

Maturity; HIGH... Deaths, knives, blood...
Fantasy; HIGH... Elves.

So here I stand with a broken smile,
Waiting for hours, knowing it'll last a while.
With a knife through my heart, the pain still lasts,
I've gotta find a way to survive, and fast.

Oh, so little blood that I have left,
After you commited the greatest of thefts.
You stole my heart and cursed it through,
Then left me there, with nothing left to do.

Love won't cure my uneasy pain,
Because all it'll do is make me insane.
I'm left all shattered and unable to speak,
It just makes me look like a moronic freak.

What am I to do, as I eventually come to burn,
As my soul tears up as it twists and turns?
So what if I chose to kill myself?
To you, I'm just your average elf.

You didn't love me and I knew it all along,
And so I die, singing our song.
But why didn't you show me before,
That I was the one that you adore.

I learnt it all just a little too late,
I'm not a fool, and I'm not just dead weight.
You really loved me, and you finally cared,
But why didn't you tell me, before death was declared?


Dedication to T x L, and now Lazuri killed herself.. :/
This is all in Lazuri's point of view.
So the post is violet, because her RP color was violet.
Enjoy... ):
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Post by Komoda 6/25/2010, 10:14 pm

Aw, such a beautifully dark poem, as always. I could really feel your emotion in this one, especially. Amazing job! :3

Oh, so little blood that I have left,
After you commited the greatest of thefts.
You stole my heart and cursed it through,
Then left me there, with nothing left to do.

I found this stanza to be my favourite in particular. Very well written, Afi!
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/26/2010, 8:42 am

Thanks alot, Mo. It feels good to write about T x L, a bit.. :/
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Post by Avé 6/26/2010, 3:59 pm

Gorgeous, Mia. This one is absolutely stunning!
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/26/2010, 4:01 pm

Thanks... Ave... :'3
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Post by Crystal Aura 6/26/2010, 4:48 pm

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww! This is soooooooooooooooooooooo deep. xD
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/26/2010, 4:50 pm

Thanks. Razz
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Post by Noah the Flood 6/26/2010, 6:05 pm

This is amazing Mia, like most of your poems. But I can feel the emotion in the T x L dedications the most. I know how hard it was for you to kill her off.
But this is beautiful.
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/26/2010, 6:08 pm

It's hard to write these poems, too. D:
But yeah.. thanks, though. (:
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Post by Rai 6/26/2010, 9:03 pm

:')
I love this one, too. nod
There goes the nod smiley! >D

Anyways, lol:
I think this one's really fantastic: I love the depth of it. The last stanza is my favorite. :') I'm so sad she died, though. Sad Amazing job, as always, Mia. Smile



/excuse lack of colorfulness of vocabulary. I is tired at the moment. nod
Dang nod smiley! D:<
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/26/2010, 9:09 pm

I love the last stanza, as well. <33
Thank you, Kitkat.
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Post by rattyjol 6/26/2010, 9:14 pm

That's... depressing. o_0

Really good, though. Very Happy
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 6/26/2010, 9:17 pm

Thanks, Ratt-Sama!
Yeah, it's hard to stop myself from crying. x___x
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Post by warriorcatlover 7/7/2010, 1:21 pm

You didn't love me and I knew it all along,
And so I die, singing our song.
But why didn't you show me before,
That I was the one that you adore.

My dear Lazuri...
This... breaks my heart... (whatever remains of it. XD)

Teloren, this poem was all your fault!!
No!..... *shunned in corner again and sighs* Yes...
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Post by Malicious Nightmares 7/7/2010, 1:23 pm

It's half my fault, half Telorens... sinister
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