The Only One (in writing)

Maturity: G
Fantasy: None

Intro
Can’t you see?
You’re the only one for me.
I don’t want anyone else,
No not one, except for you.

Can’t you see?
Soon the chance will be gone,
Hurry. Before I’m gone, gone . . .
Please, please, please, come to me.
[End intro]

Verse
Tell me, boy, what can I do?
To make you see-ee . . . me?
You never look my way;
Your gaze goes right through,
And I watch with jealousy as the other one smiles.

(And that's as far as I've gotten. XD)

Good job! I can't wait to read more.

Thanks! Haha, I'm glad someone finally even commented on this one.

I like it, it obviously needs a bit of a finnnish but I love how your poems are always more like songs It's a really cool style!

For some reason, I like guy-perspective songs better. It sounds weird to call someone boy. It makes it sound like she's some weird person that's older than the guy, the rest is good, but it just doesn't seem like my kinda song.

Thanks Jade! x3 Yeah, I prefer writing songs to poems . . . idk why. xD

Thanks for the input, Gri! I see what you mean.

It's cool and makes you stand out which is always good

Ya, that is good. x3 I like being unique.

That's awesome.

Thanks. ^^