My poem
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My poem
by pirox_2012 3/11/2010, 10:41 pm
come and take a walk with me,
where we go you will see,
all the things we could be
come and have a chat with me,
I'll tell you, you'll tell me,
Then our hearts will be free
come and have a seat with me,
We won't talk, we'll just see,
Everything we want to be
come and heal my broken heart,
I've known you could from the start,
I didn't think that you'd want to,
heal a heart so black and blue
from all the times I didn't have you,
come and take a walk with me,
where we go you will see,
our future and our destiny
where we go you will see,
all the things we could be
come and have a chat with me,
I'll tell you, you'll tell me,
Then our hearts will be free
come and have a seat with me,
We won't talk, we'll just see,
Everything we want to be
come and heal my broken heart,
I've known you could from the start,
I didn't think that you'd want to,
heal a heart so black and blue
from all the times I didn't have you,
come and take a walk with me,
where we go you will see,
our future and our destiny
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Re: My poem
by shadowsowner888 3/12/2010, 4:05 pm
Nice job. x3 I think it's good! Does it have a name?
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Re: My poem
by Puckspaw 3/12/2010, 4:13 pm
Hey, I've read this poem before! Could you be a friend of Novastare? Lol
Anyway, really awesome job!
Anyway, really awesome job!
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Re: My poem
by FOREIGN?! 3/14/2010, 7:08 pm
Wonderful! I love how you switched up the rhythm in the fourth stanza. Pure epicness. 8D
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Re: My poem
by Malicious Nightmares 3/18/2010, 2:39 pm
I agree with all the comments said, above! This is an amazing poem! 
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