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A Story I am Writing For My Bff's B-day gift

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Post by shadowsowner888 4/28/2010, 12:43 am

I think you're off to a good start! :3 You could do a little work on bringing the readers into the story by showing what happens rather than just describing it, if that makes any sense. But regardless, I'm sure your friend will love it. ^^
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Post by shadowsowner888 4/28/2010, 6:22 pm

Eep! xD Good luck!
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