Re: No Answer - A Finished Short Story by Mo

by **rattyjol** 10/1/2009, 12:05 am

Aw... maybe editing will add more. Very Happy

by **Komoda** 10/1/2009, 8:32 am

Yeah, maybe. I don't plan on editing this, though... 'Cause it's not like I want it published or anything. XP

by **Arianna** 10/1/2009, 9:57 am

You don't? 0.0
It was really good. nod

by **Komoda** 10/1/2009, 3:16 pm

Aw, thanks! Very Happy

by **shadowsowner888** 10/1/2009, 6:20 pm

WE SHOULD PUT IT IN TWIGBOOK II. x333

That was AWESOMEFUL!! xD Haha, now everything actually makes sense! To an extent. And that's a really funny, unexpected scenario too. The whole "fornication" thing. (I'm ashamed to say I know what that means. ^^') Aaaaaand, I loved the fantasy summary. xD

by **Komoda** 10/1/2009, 7:23 pm

Oooh, that would be cool. Very Happy

XP Thanks!! Very Happy

I'll explain everything further in the sequel. nod

by catbuster 10/1/2009, 7:28 pm

Omg! I am sooo excited for the sequal. Write it soon PUH-LEASE!

by **Komoda** 10/1/2009, 7:40 pm

Thanks, but I can't write the sequel anytime soon, sorry. I have to focus on my other story, and school of course.

by catbuster 10/1/2009, 9:07 pm

Darn oh well. Better late than never I suppose.

by **Komoda** 10/1/2009, 9:35 pm

Yeah. XP

by **shadowsowner888** 10/3/2009, 12:01 pm

I can't wait for the next one suddenly. *twitch* *.*

by **Komoda** 10/3/2009, 5:47 pm

Sowwy I can't get it done sooner. ._.

by **shadowsowner888** 10/4/2009, 9:41 am

That's all right. x3

by **Nightowl** 10/4/2009, 4:28 pm

I don't think I commented after I read this... but anyways, it was very enjoyable. Smile

Great job, nice ending. xD

by **Komoda** 10/4/2009, 10:08 pm

Thanks!

by **Komoda** 10/18/2009, 7:33 pm

I added a playlist up front for Kayda... XP It should be all clean, so yeah.

by **shadowsowner888** 10/19/2009, 5:22 pm

Oooh, ATL? Very Happy

I'mma listening to this.

by **Komoda** 10/19/2009, 6:47 pm

Yeah!

by catbuster 10/20/2009, 9:49 pm

Omg I love Teenagers, oh and Love drunk those songs rock! So when do you think we will be getting an eye on the sequal a week, a month, a year, a century?

by **Komoda** 10/20/2009, 10:51 pm

Um, winter long weekend. And that's a promise. XP Maybe sooner, it depends how I do with BR. XD Oh, and then there's The Nano... :/

by **shadowsowner888** 10/21/2009, 8:45 pm

Okay. There was something . . . OH YEAH!! Very Happy

When Josh asked Kayda if she was crying, and she said no, she totally needed to expand on that!! xP Instead of just no, she shoulda said, "No. I'm just making a lasagna."

And then, I noticed something. xD I'm surprised I did, cus I usually don't notice this stuff. But in the beginning, Kayda wished she had her iPod because she was bored on the way to the mall. And then, later on the iPod suddenly appears in her backpack for her to listen to . . . er. xD Yeah.

by **Komoda** 10/21/2009, 11:08 pm

Lol, omg, that would have been epic. XP

Aw, darn. XP Thanks for lettin' me know. I'll just look for it then change it. And I'll just post the changes in a post below here so that you can edit it easily for Twigbook.

by **Komoda** 10/21/2009, 11:11 pm

Part 3

Kayda glided over to her cupboards, where she shoved a few poptarts down her throat. She needed to be nice and full before she started her voyage. Taking a swig of apple cider to wash it down, she grabbed a granola bar and a bottle of water for the road; she had to keep her load light, so that's all she was bringing. She made sure to pack lots of money too so that she could buy something once in town.

She didn't have time to pack anything else, so she just grabbed a small backpack for her bottle and snack. It would have been a good idea to pack stuff for emergencies, but she didn't have time to think about that. It was almost noon and she wanted to get somewhere before dark.

After grabbing her watch and her Ipod at the last minute, Kayda waved good bye to her home before dashing to the garage. She stopped halfway there and began to slow the pace, realizing she should have been conserving her energy. It wasn't long before she entered the doors of the building.

Okay, here's the first edited part. I posted the whole chunk just so that it would be easier for you to find.

Part 4

The teenager had been biking for a while and by now, her newly refilled bottle of water already empty and only crumbs left of her snack. Though she was full and no longer thirsty, her legs were still cramped and she needed to stop for a moment. She had no idea what time it was, but the city was in view. She figured it would only take another 20 minutes before she got there.
Checking her watch, she saw that it was 2:00.

I was biking for two hours straight? she thought, impressed with herself. Well, that's a record!

It explained how tired her legs were, that's for sure. She was thankful that she didn't have much longer to go before reaching the city, though. She desperately hoped it wasn't as eerily quiet as it was in the country. Kayda couldn't even hear the birds chirping anymore. It was probably the first time she actually missed the racket of the noisy pests that woke her up every morning before her alarm; Magpies were the worst for that.

Once her aching limbs felt a bit better, she mounted on her bike and started aiming towards the factory buildings looming ahead. In the back of her mind, she kind of wanted her Ipod, but she didn't want to kill her momentum by getting off her bike again. Kayda figured she should be enjoying herself, anyway; even without music. This was an adventure, here! One right out of the story books. Okay, maybe it wasn't that exciting... But much better than any other Monday morning she's ever experienced.

Fixed this up too. Yee haw! cheesy

by catbuster 10/22/2009, 5:18 pm

Alright, good!

by **shadowsowner888** 10/23/2009, 6:15 pm

Yah, it woulda been. Very Happy

Lol, that makes things easier!! xD Thanks Mo.

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